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Every country should have a free health service; even if that means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive.

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There is no question that it is necessary to have free health services in every country. But the popular belief is that impossible to give the modern medical treatments to everybody because of
high price
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the high price
high prices
. What are the main ways exist in order to solve
this
 obstacle? There are many possible ways of approaching
this
 topic and it is
easiest
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easy
 to illustrate that it is very hard for the
government
 to pay for all health services. It is undeniable that medical insurances exist in order to cover a special
treatment
.
First
 of all, it is true that not a big
numbers
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number
 of people need to have expensive modern medical equipment.
Secondly
, people pay taxes for a health service and it is hard to imagine how they may increase, if people will pay for everybody medical needs in the county.
Thus
, it is clear why a lot of people gravitate towards the idea that it is possible to have an absolutely free medical
treatment
 in society. Another are
of
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on
about
this
 topic
that is
 worth looking at is that some groups of people in every country cannot pay for the latest medical treatments by themselves. Some of them,
such
 as pensioners, are too old to work and earn a lot of money,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 of them,
for instance
 handicap people, do not able to do it. Definitely, the society and the
government
 are responsible
of
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for
 them and should help them with an expensive
treatment
. It can
also
 be said that it is necessary to have special medical programs from the
government
 side and the charity help from the side of ordinary people. Taking into account everything mentioned above, I am inclined to believe, that it is impossible to have the latest medical
treatment
 for everyone in the country absolutely free. But in my opinion, some disable and old people should have a full support from the
government
 and society in
this
 issue.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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