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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
In the 20th
century
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 the environmental problem was a big Issue. It can
be happened
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happen
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 with a great loss of specific species Of plants and
animals
 and
also
 can
be happened
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happen
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on
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with
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another Causes
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another cause
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. Both of them are
a
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apply
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concerning things that
related
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are related
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 to Our main environmental problems. Plants,
animals
, human beings and all other elements are the Part of an
environment
. If any of those parts is missing,
then
 it Can
because
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cause
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 an issue. Because all of those elements
are Playing
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play
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 an important role
to save
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in saving
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 our
environment
 from different
Types
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types
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 of disasters.
For example
, if a species of plants which Give
animals'
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animals
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 food are being lost.
Then
 those
animals
 which Are
being
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dependent on that specific
plants’
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plant’s
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 food is being in Hunger and eventually
died
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die
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 in time frame. If that specific
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Animal
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Animals
are being
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dead
completed
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,
then
 those
animals
 with Are dependent on that
animals
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animal
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also
 be in a great food crisis. And
this
 cycle goes on and
create
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creates
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 an environmental issue.
Besides
, there are
also
 other important environmental Problems which are being created by human beings
for living
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to live
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 a Standard lifestyle.
For instance
, human beings are building
Sky scrapers
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Skyscrapers
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 and
industry
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industries
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for earning
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to earn
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 more money
where
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when
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 they Need
earth
 resources like
woods
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wood
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, petroleum and so on. Make A great evaluation in
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector, the resources of
earth
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the earth
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 Have been taken out more.
And
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This
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this
causes
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has
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 a great impact on
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the
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earth's
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earth
 nature and
also
 the
earth
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earth's
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 atmosphere and creates some Extreme environmental problems. In my honest opinion, it has been concluded that
,
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 both Reasons are responsible for creating the main
environment
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environmental
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Problem of our time. The problem of status cannot Depend on any specific reason. Because it is created from the Situation
from
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of
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 the living creatures of
environment
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the environment
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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