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Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this?

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Nowadays most children regularly play games on a computer or their television. These games have become more violent over the past few years. In fact, many parents worry about
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 and the effect these games are having on their children. Some are concerned that playing violent games might encourage them to come aggressive in real life. What we need to establish is whether or not
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, it may help to look back at the games that children used to play many years ago before the invention of computers. In those days children would probably have played popular board games
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 as Monopoly or Chess, or they may have played card games or some type of outdoor sport. These sports or games would probably only have encouraged children to become more competitive rather than violent.
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, throughout history children have always played fighting games with toy or pretend weapons. Even now many parents will buy a toy gun or sword for their child. Why have we never read reports in the media about the impact plastic weapons could have on children? Perhaps
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 is because the link between play fighting and actual fighting is not very strong. In conclusion, the way children play games has changed with the times, but the ideas behind those games have actually changed very little. Just as playing at soldiers did not increase violence in the past, I believe that playing computer games will not lead to an increase in violence in the future. I think that if we looked more closely at life in our major cities,
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 we would find there are many other possible causes for the increase in crime and violence.

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