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Some people think the newly built houses should be the same as the old houses in local areas. Others argue that local authorities should allow people to build houses in their own styles. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that when building a new
house
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,
people
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 should
design
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 it the same as other old
houses
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 in
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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,
while
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 other
people
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 believe that
people
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 should be allowed to
design
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 their own
house
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according to
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 their wishes. Both sides of
this
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 argument are agreed and disagreed by many.
This
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 essay will thoroughly analyse and discuss both views before drawing a reasoned opinion.
Firstly
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, many argue that building a new
house
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 similar to the existing one will promote equality among the neighbours. If the government introduce
such
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 rules
then
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 the richer
people
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 will not be able to construct bigger
houses
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.
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, in many developing cities, rich
people
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 build big apartments which indirectly
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 the poor
people
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.
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, if all
people
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 have the same
design
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 of
houses
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then
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 it will promote equality in local areas.
On the other hand
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 , some
also
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 believe that the local authorities should give permission to the
people
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 to
design
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 their
house
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however
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 they want and I completely agree with that notion. In my opinion, I believe that an individual should have the right to construct their residence in their own way.
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,the government can enforce laws about the structure and floors of
houses
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not designs.
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,
people
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 are happy to follow various criteria to build an earthquake-proof
house
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.
Thus
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, building a new
house
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 similar to neighbours does not make sense to me.
To conclude
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, after
thorough
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a thorough
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 analysis of both sides of the argument, I truly believe that
people
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 should have full right to decide about the designs and styles of their
houses
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.
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, authorities can enforce criteria to ensure safety.

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relevant specific examples
Incorporate more detailed and specific examples to enhance the arguments and clarify your points further.
supported main points
Ensure each main point is sufficiently supported with evidence or explanation to strengthen your argumentation.
clear comprehensive ideas
Elaborate more on why you agree with the second viewpoint to provide clearer reasoning and depth.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, establishing and summarizing the discussed points effectively.
logical structure
There is a well-defined structure presenting both sides of the argument, contributing to the logical flow of ideas.
complete response
The task response is fairly complete, addressing the topic by discussing both viewpoints and providing an opinion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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