The chart below shows the main reasons why people choose to make or break friendship connection on a popular social media site.

The chart below shows the main reasons why people choose to make or break friendship connection on a popular social media site.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of reasons why people befriend and unfriend connections on a renowned social media site. In
general
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there is a significant difference between percentages of reasonings behind befriending a connection. The difference can be seen in the
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percentage of knowing in real life and mutual
friends
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friends'
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reason
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reasons
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towards business networks, attractiveness, and increasing friend count.
On the contrary
, there is only a considerable amount of percentage gap in various motivations to unfriend connections. Most people agreed to befriend a connection for the
reason
of knowing them in real life and mutual friends, with approximately 80% and 58% agreement respectively.
However
, reasonings which include business networks lay low with only around 9%, attractiveness
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8%, and increasing friend count at
last
place with approximately 7%. In terms of unfriending a connection, offensive comments with about 56%
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the main
reason
and lack of interaction with around 20% is the least chosen
reason
to unfriend.
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from the bottom, depressing comments, with a slight difference compared to the least supported
reason
, around 22%.
In addition
, between the three reasons mentioned before lies two other reasons: don’t know well around 43% and are trying to sell something around 38%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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