Your local newspaper published an advertisement asking people to help with protecting the environment. Write a letter to offer your help to the project manager and say Why are you interested What can you help with When can you start

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter regarding your advertisement on 8 August, 2023 about saving the environment and
educate
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people
to understand the importance of protecting the environment. My name is Hitesh Dawar, I am a resident of Jyoti Nagar Jalandhar, and I am keenly interested in participating in the campaign. I have always been a nature lover and participate in related activities. I have already planted 240+ saplings in different areas of the locations. I personally take care of many and others are maintained by my friends and colleagues. We are a team of 30
people
so I think it will be a great addition to the campaign. we are committed to educating
people
door-to-door as we can spare our weekends
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for work.
Additionally
, we have a few individuals who are good at social media to spread the campaign and educate
people
online. Apart from that we can
also
arrange small events and create plays related to conservation and recycling. Me and my team are available to start immediately
also
we are okay to work with other volunteers. Please let me know the
further
details and if there is any need of meeting in person, I would be available as per your schedule. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Hitesh Dawar
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greeting and closing
Ensure you use the correct format for a formal letter, including proper salutations and closings. The opening and closing of your letter are a bit informal.
logical structure
Improve the logical structure of your letter by clearly organizing the information and ensuring a logical progression of ideas.
single idea per paragraph
Maintain one clear idea per paragraph and use linking words and phrases to connect the paragraphs for better readability.
complete response
Your response shows relevance to the topic and you demonstrated the ability to use personal experience to address the task, reflecting good task achievement. However, ensure all parts of the prompt are fully addressed with sufficient detail.
suitable writing tone
Utilize a more formal tone throughout the letter to suit the context of writing to a project manager, particularly in a letter intended for an official purpose.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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