Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Recently, newcomer parents have not been spending enough
time
with their children
. Therefore
, they often use easier ways of parenting such
as sending them to grandparents or letting them use smartphones
extensively, leading to increased smartphone usage among children
. In the essay, I explained both the advantages and disadvantages of this
situation.
In terms of benefits, smartphones
offer educational opportunities and connectivity. In the digital era, educational resources are easily accessible from everywhere through the internet and smartphones
. Moreover
, many social media can provide the information needed. For instance
, generation Z children
prefer using platforms such
as Tiktok
over Correct your spelling
TikTok
google
for their searches. Another significant benefit is connectivity. The internet brings people closer together, especially Capitalize word
Google
new generation
youth, who certainly connect with others. Add a hyphen
new-generation
As a result
, platforms such
as social media communities and dating apps not only facilitate social interactions but also
foster deeper social connections by linking people to another one
with similar interests.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
On the other hand
, smartphones
come with adverse effects for some kids such
as delays in social and emotional development or lack of physical activities and sleep quality. The most noticeable negative impact is social and emotional development. Smartphone usage blocks children
’s ability via non face-to-face
interactions, leading to problems Add a hyphen
non-face-to-face
for
developing empathy, emotional intelligence and interpersonal skills. Another negative aspect is physical health issues. Change preposition
in
While
Correct word choice
When
children
spend time
on a smartphone, it decreases physical activity and high-quality sleep time
,bringing them to health issues such
as obesity and cognitive problems.
In conclusion, smartphones
are two-edged swords that have positive and negative sides. For suggestions, I recommend that parents should spend enough time
with their children
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