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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company. why might be this case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? give your reasons for answer

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Many people aspire to start their own business
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 of working in a captive environment. The foremost reason for
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 preference is the, liberty, which people get by working independently.
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 gives the impression to have benefits, but, it has his own drawbacks. On the one hand, working independently allows the individual not to be bound by the regulations and be compliant with the terms of the company. Not every individual appreciates of having someone to dictate the terms and adhere policies. Many people who are employed are often limited to use their skills, ideas and not able to express their thoughts.
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, Raj Kandra, who once worked for an MNC left his job to start a career in fashion designing. He formed a fashion boutique startup named Jiggly which later turned out to be one of the successful startups of the 21st century.
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, being self-employed requires a great deal of skills and boundless professional abilities to achieve the goal. Primarily, it includes large investment to commence, which not only involves risks with no guarantee of profit.
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, with no profit, individual must bear all the losses and consequences arise from being self-employed.
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, Sebastian, founder of
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 invested a vast amount of money to kick start his business which eventually turned to be a bad asset. Later,
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 led to the closure of the company and going into bankruptcy. In conclusion, working independently may allow the individuals not to be bound by the policies of the company, but not every individual manages to lead a successful life through self-employment
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • work-life balance
  • constraints
  • traditional job
  • steady income
  • responsibility
  • expertise
  • establishing
  • isolation
  • support network
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