In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
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thing
for Fix the agreement mistake
things
people
. In some countries the number of overweight people
is growing up
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apply
also
their level of healthy life
are
falling. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
This
essay will examine the main causes for
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of
unhealthy
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the unhealthy
life style
and some possible Correct your spelling
lifestyle
solution
to Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
this
problem. There are two main causes of people
become
overweight and their Wrong verb form
becoming
poorly
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poor
life style
. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
Firstly
, nowadays machinery plays main
role in Correct article usage
a main
people
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people's
life
. Addicting to the technology that Fix the agreement mistake
lives
make
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makes
people
obese. That it
means, using automation to make Correct pronoun usage
apply
life
more easily
. Most Wrong verb form
easier
people
using
technology for their Wrong verb form
use
day to
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day-to-day
day
work, such
as chatting with friends, Correct word choice
and get
get
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getting
to
knowledge about foods. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, most children
like to play video games at home also
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and also
watching
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watch
Tv
. Correct your spelling
TV
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usually watching
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watch
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TV
more
than 6 hours per Change preposition
for more
day
, while
they are watching tv such
a long time, Change preposition
for such
their
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they
missed
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miss
chance
to play outdoor games Correct article usage
the chance
as well as
losing
the chance to communicate with those, Wrong verb form
lose
that
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which
make
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makes
children
lazy in their day to
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day-to-day
day
life
even though they become fatty. It's
clearly Unnecessary verb
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seem
that using more technology Correct subject-verb agreement
seems
do
harmful things to Correct subject-verb agreement
does
people
. Secondly
, one of the most popular fact
in society is fast Change to a plural noun
facts
food
. Eating more fast food
people
get sick within
time. Change preposition
in
Although
people
can't get enough vitamins, proteins
from eating Correct word choice
and proteins
those
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that kind
those kinds
kind
of food
. Not getting enough vitamins and proteins is the one reason for health issues such
as,
skin problems, Remove the comma
apply
bone
problems. For example, nowadays Correct word choice
and bone
teenagers
favourite Change noun form
teenagers'
teenager's
kind
of fast food
places is
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are
Mcdonals
, Correct your spelling
McDonald
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and Buger
Buger
King. Having more burgers even though Correct your spelling
Burger
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kind
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kinds
which
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apply
use
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used
for
make burgers are harmful to the human body, those ingredients might be reasons for cancer Change preposition
to
also
so many sicknesses. For this
issue, there is some solution people
can follow. First
thing is government should increase the price of fast snack even though should decrease the value of organic foodstuff, because Correct article usage
The first
of
ordinary Change preposition
apply
people
are more addicted to fast food
because,
quick meal is Remove the comma
apply
in
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at
lower
price Correct article usage
a lower
also
easily getting also
easily get it from anywhere. Organic meal
, which are very healthy Fix the agreement mistake
meals
also
can get more vitamins. Those natural cuisine
are sold at higher Change the determiner
cuisines
price
in the market, that the reason to buy Fix the agreement mistake
prices
those
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that kind
those kinds
kind
of foods. It's clearly seen that decreasing the value of natural cuisine people
can be
a void in fast meals. Verb problem
fill
Moreover
everyone should start eating environmentally friendly products. The other solution for an unhealthy lifestyle, Add a comma
Moreover,
in
particular
country government should recommend a healthy diet plan for Add the comma(s)
particular,
people
, even children
also
recommend some outdoor games that help to stay fit. In the diet plan there
some important Rephrase
apply
fact
should be included, Fix the agreement mistake
facts
such
as vitamin C, greens, drinking more water, 30 minute
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and 30-minute
workout
per Fix the agreement mistake
workouts
day
. Following those steps people
can keep fit. In conclusion, unhealthy activity is the main trouble in society. For this
questionAdd a comma
,
the
main two reasons Correct article usage
apply
such
as addicted
to Add a missing verb
being addicted
the
automation and fast Correct article usage
apply
food
. To get ride
of Correct your spelling
rid
those
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that kind
those kinds
kind
of problems people
can kick off habit
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the habit
to follow
diet Change preposition
of following
plan
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plans
also
the government should decrease the value of organic cuisine. Following those suggested resolution
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resolutions
people
can take care of themselves.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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