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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

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Globally, the need for the consumption of meal in increasing.
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, outline that
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 problem can be solved by introducing family planning schemes by the government. The principle cause for the increment in demand of meals is the surging population.
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 is to say, countries are facing problems with the increase in the birth rate. The more the number of people, the more will be the requirement of foodstuff for feeding.
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,
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 puts a lot of pressure on the countries to allocate a huge amount of funds in the production of foodstuff. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times showed that many metropolitan countries allocate more than 80 percent of funds in producing meals for feeding millions of people. The most feasible solution for the above mentioned problem is introducing family planning for people.
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, the government should motivate and educate people through various campaigns and seminars for not having more than 2 children. As more the children will be born, more will be the need for food. Through these programs, people will be encouraged to have less children,
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 reducing the people and food demand. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times showed that more than 60 percent of countries are organising programs to influence people to opt for family planning. To conclude, the primary reason for increment in food consumption is the rise in society,
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, the most viable solution to
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 problem is to educate people about the advantages of family planning.
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