The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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Nowadays, sole career is accepted like an outmoded concept. I will discuss both sides of public opinion to having only one job or more ways to make money.

Firstly

, I will discuss why people tend to find additional actions for maintaining their life, and

secondly

, I will explore what action, people are taking to do.

First

, many people feel that having one profession is not enough to meet their needs. There are increased elements individuals need to have.

For example

, families send their children expensive course centres, which has a high demand, to win the university entrance exam. Another reason, undeveloped countries have not stable economies. Communities have to handle it with some movements to defeat it. An example for

this

is that gas prices are increasing every single day. They cannot supply anymore with these prices.

On the other hand

, persons seek many forms to continue their lives. The new education is a one of them. There are many approaches to do.

For instance

, several related courses about their business may assist to get a promotion.

Furthermore

, another profession will aid to do their wills and needs.

Such

as a person is who has a job in a factory on the mornings can

also

earn money as a taxi driver on nights. In conclusion, why we are looking for new ways to make money and how. In my opinion, these actions are a necessity in the modern world. Individuals may overcome,

however families

Accept comma addition

however, families

with children will have struggles. People have to make more efforts to live better as I mentioned reasons above.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many young people today leave their own countries to work abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages on working abroad and give your own opinion.

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Many people say that university education should only be offered to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people with varying marks and all ages, even if they did not do well. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

There is a historical building in your town and the city council wants to pull it down because there is no money for repairs. You are not happy with this decision. Write a letter to the city council and say Why is the building important? Suggest a solution to finance the repairs.