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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree or with this

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It is opined by a few people that that most important objective of a
person
 in
this
 workplace should be to concentrate on their
work
 and focusing on establishing amiable relationships in the offices is not essential. Though I agree that one's underlying focus should be his
work
, I disagree that creating and maintaining friendly relationships is not thing to focus on. I think that a
person
's
work
 should be at his highest priority because a company pays him for that purpose and his utmost responsibility should be to complete his designated tasks.
Additionally
, his
work
 helps him in getting a promotion and maybe a better life.
In other words
, he can attain everything that he ever dreamt of by prioritizing it.
For instance
, successful people
such
 as Bill Gates and Jeff Bass are touching the zenith of their careers because they never neglected their
work
 and followed the rule of '
work
 is worship'.
However
, I
also
 firmly believe that a healthy working culture is indispensable and to maintain it, a
person
 should create healthy relationships there with the people because they are the people who surround you every day and negativity is never good for working spaces as it gives rise to filthy politics and various issues arising due to it. For instant, despite a bright future, one of my uncle left his renowned promising job because people were quite negative there and it was difficult for him to adjust in
such
 environment. In conclusion, though I firmly believe that a
person
's
work
 is of utmost importance in a workplace, but the importance of working environment is
also
 quite significant, and in any circumstance, cannot be thought as less essential.

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