Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Since long ago, people have been arguing that protecting animals hurt them, some people hold the idea that keeping animals in zoos have some advantages;
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, some people stick to the point that keeping animals in captivity in zoos is erroneous.
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, I personally agree with the latter group.
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with, animals are under threat from humans because of cutting trees and hunting animals. When animals are kept in captivity in zoos we destroy their natural life;
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, animals that are protected in zoos con not behave naturally.
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, liens can hardly walk for 50 meters when are kept in cages.
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, when they live in jangle they walk for a hundred kilometres.
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, the temperature is extremely an important factor in habitats.
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, a hot
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contributes to the death of penguins because they must live in a cold
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, when people affect the
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by cutting trees and fossil fuels and release exhaust fume, they contribute to global warming so the weather becomes hotter and melt polar ice. From another point of view, zoos provide a safe place for animals, so protect endangered animals from extinction.
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, zoos provide opportunities for people to have contact with wild animals;
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, many animals are treated in zoos because more Zookeeper receives professional training before work in zoos, they know diet and lifestyle of animals;
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, they live longer;
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, by vaccinating animal veterinarians protect them from death and do not be sick because protecting animals in zoos can protect
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from damage and disrupting of a balanced ecosystem
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, zoos have entertainment aspects of people and they can learn about different kinds of species in zoos. In conclusion, animals should protect from danger and extinction in their natural habitats, but they should not keep in captivity in zoos.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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