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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How can this problem be overcome?

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Nowadays, many people have big problems to find balance between
work
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life
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 and their lives. The business world requires more and more
time
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 to hard
work
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 and be emotional health is totally necessary. Not only a family is feeling that, but
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 the human relations,
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, there is a lot of people with poor mental health primarily in big cities, when is a labour source. To find harmony it is necessary, provide priorities, manage the
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 and be focused on
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.
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 of all, the
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work
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worker
 spends much
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 during a day.
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 to travel to the office and for back home. The getting out of
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 situation is provide priorities, because there are not only
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life
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, but
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 the social
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.
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, the business world occupied much
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 in a day, as a consequence, demand manages the
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 and don't overestimate that.
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 as organized all tasks and obligations, naturally think of during the weekend be with family and relax.
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, another point totally important to balance a
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 is to be knowledge about focus, whereas there are many things to disturb the mind.
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, a person who
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works
 with technology and internet, exist a lot of advertisements to take focus at
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. For that reason, the big
work
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 actually is knowing how balance a
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 to be healthy and prepared to go forward,
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 don’t forget about yourself, provide priorities, manage the
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 and be focused.
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