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Some people think that the inteernet has brought people closer togethert while others that people and communities are bbecome more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Few people assume that due to
internet
people are
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people, are
 close to each other.
On the other
hand few
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hand, few
 people
thinks
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think
 due to
internet
 people are becoming so isolated.In
this
 essay we will
disscus
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discusses
 positive and negative effects of
internet
 on the people.How to use it in a better way. Due to
new teconology
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the new technology, internet
the new technology internet
new technology internet
internet
 helps people to get close.
people
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People
 who
is working
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are working
have worked
 abroad and
studing
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
standing
 out of their countries can easily talk with their family members and friends
for instance
, in
U
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the U
.S
their
in or at that place
there
 is
lot
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lots
 of
internet
 club where students use
internet
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the internet
 and
do
engage in
make
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
 calls to their family.And due to social media people can easily talk
with
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to
 their friends and family members who lives abroad.
On the other hand
 people are so busy
on
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with
 their social media they
are nt giving
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are not given
are not giving
time
 to people around.
they
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They
 have
lot
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lots
 of
friend
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friends
 on social
media but
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media, but
dont
do not
don't
 have a single friend
to spend
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spend
 a
time
 with.
in
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In
this
 way they
r
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
or
 isolated with their own family and friend.
for
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For
instance in
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instance, in
italy
a republic in southern Europe on the Italian Peninsula; was the core of the Roman Republic and the Roman Empire between the 4th century BC and the 5th century AD
Italy
 a lot of people are taking
antidepressed
any of a class of drugs used to treat depression; often have undesirable side effects
antidepressant
medicine
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medications
 due to isolation. In my opinion
,
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,
we should use
internet
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the internet
 wisely.We should fix the
time
 of
net
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the net
.And try to spend more
time
 with friends and family.
we
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We
 should keep
balance
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a balance
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • facilitated
  • connection
  • geographical barriers
  • social media platforms
  • sense of belonging
  • diverse perspectives
  • collaborate
  • share knowledge
  • excessive use
  • social isolation
  • face-to-face interaction
  • addicted
  • disconnection
  • physical surroundings
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • withdraw
  • false sense of connection
  • superficial relationships
  • polarization
  • echo chambers
  • balance
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • foster
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