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Many of the world's cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solutions can you suggest?

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Today, many people in different countries of the world face poverty and a lack of housing space. In
this
 essay, I will talk about several reasons for
this
 problem and what decision needs to be made. Many children from an early age to go to different schools and educational institutions in order to receive
education
Suggestion
an education
. But most of these children become lazy or for some other reason drop out of
school
 and put a big cross on their bright future. The
first
 reasons for
this
 video game of various kinds. Some people believe that video games improve a child’s memory and intelligence. But there is some other problem in
this
, if you do not take into account the time spent in the game,
that is
, get hooked on
this
 game, it will be very easy to drop out of
school
. Based on all
this
, we can confidently predict the future of
this
 child. After leaving
school
, naturally he will not have a diploma with a higher
education
. And many employers will not want to give him a good job with a good salary. Sooner or later, he will need to earn a living and, without
education
 in low-wage jobs, he will not be able to satisfy his needs. But in some countries there is not even an ordinary
school
 where children can study mathematics, which is a necessary subject in our life.
For example
, in India, Indians do not try to educate their children,
although
 India today is considered to be developed in the subject of industry and technology, many people in India are considered unemployed and do not have a permanent location (housing) In conclusion from all
this
, you can understand how important
education
 is in our lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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