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Tourists cause more harm than good to local people and the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people might think that environmental conditions and local peoples situations become worse when tourists visit them, but I do not believe that.
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 of all, tourists bring money with them to a region,
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 can improve the economy of the area,
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, local people have more money for their families. An additional advantage of tourists is that they could draw attention of investors to the area to build new hotels, malls, restaurants and so on.
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 can improve local services, like schools and hospitals.
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However tourists
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However, tourists
 can make troubles too. The most important drawback of visitors is they could destroy the environment by harming the habitat of animals and plants. In my opinion the tourists advantages clearly outweight its disadvantages, despite a few problems with the environment

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