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It is better for young to get advice from older people than young people. Do you agree or disagree?

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We all met tough moments when we need some advance, some different point of view. Who we will ask for the help
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 moment, young or elderly person and whose opinion will be more preferable? Let's check
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 out. On the one hand, an older man has an experience of the ages that possibly could be matched to your particular situation. At the same time, elderly people are more tolerant to mistakes we all did and, in general, do not blame for it. What is more, it is always fun to talk with a retired one to know what the life was looking like in the distant days. The history is a cycle, and situations could be repeated with a little difference. It could be handled for analysing and making a decision according to your life situation.
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, if you ask an opinion from young people, you will probably get contemporary information that would work on the
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 we live in. Time is changing, new features come into the life and only young people could know them. Beside that, youngsters have the energy we all wish to have, so we can get not only an answer to our question, but the power to make our wishes come true. Even more, youthful people have a lot of ideas that could be possibly much better than your own. To put it all in the shell, In general, I rather ask an advice younger guy. It's much more easier for me to communicate and understand the position of youth people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • experience
  • modern challenges
  • peer advice
  • long-term perspective
  • contextual relevance
  • diverse perspectives
  • generational gap
  • mentorship
  • cautionary tale
  • evolving societal norms
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