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The best way to help developing countries is to give them financial aid. Write an essay either agreeing or disagreeing with this statement. Suggest alternative to this policy.

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Many people believe that the best method for improving countries is to give them financial
assistance
. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion.
Moreover
, other solutions
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will explain below. Nowadays, some people think that giving financial aid is the most helpful method for developing
country
 whilst others believe that
this
 is completely wrong. The reason why people think that help should be
financial
Suggestion
financed
financially
, because today all problems can be solved with money. But
this
 is not a good idea, if states always help others financially,
this
 will lead to dependence
in
Suggestion
on
 the end and they are always waiting for help with in
this
 way.
In addition
,
assistance
 made from other states may be in the form of debt. There are different kinds of aids to improvement
country
. One of the best ways to help develop the state is to help young generations to study. Because today many young people want to study abroad, they want to study in a modern methodology.
This
 problem bothers many applicants.
In addition
,
assistance
 may be in the form of technology.
For example
, many poor countries lack modern technology in medicine and
this
 has a bad effect on people's health. Due to the lack of
such
 tools, it is difficult to carry out operations in the
country
.
Therefore
, money is not a good help to the state if people suffer from
such
 problems. To conclude, despite the financial aid is one of the most important
assistance
 for developing
country
, but
this
 is not
only way
Suggestion
the only way
for
Suggestion
of
 improving. I believe that there has and other alternative ways which advantageous for improving countries.
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