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While mobile phones have many advantages, a number of problems have also resulted from them or the ways in which they are used. What are some of these problems? What solutions can you suggest for solving these problems?

#phones
In today's world, the number of utilizing mobile phones is increasing at an alarming rate among all ages of people. It might
initially
 appear desirable to
use
 telephones constantly, but on closer inspection the idea suffers from several problems. In
this
 essay, I will explain what problems do we have with mobile phones and how can we solve these issues. In most of the modern countries, mobile phones are used as the main tool for people-to-people communication and there are many various types of networks which are available in order to deliver messages or video messages. In
this
 case, people become less communicative, less sociable and more introvert as they
use
 of technologies
instead
 of face-to-face communication.
Also
, people are keen to
use
 the
phone
 while driving,
thus
 becoming less concentrated on the road, which is really dangerous for their lives. According to a research done in the world, 60 percent of the road accidents are the result of utilizing telephones while driving a car. To prevent using phones continuously, parents should control their children's
phone
 usage times and it will be beneficial to set limits on their children
such
 as 1hour of
phone
use
 per day.
As a result
, youngsters utilize the
phone
 only for their necessary and important needs, and in the future they will have solely face-to-face contact with their friends or relatives.
In addition
, if governments make people aware of the harmful aspects of the
phone
, individuals will reduce its
use
.
For instance
, it should be reinforced through images seen on television programmes and advertisements.
Consequently
, people will not
use
 their phones in public places, especially when driving. In conclusion, these solutions which I above mentioned will support people to interact with others more in the real life and
also
 to be more cautious when driving a car.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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