7. Many people believe that modern inventions have brought more problems than the benefits. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are different views regarding inventions.

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The majority

of people

believes

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believe

that current inventions have more disadvantages than its advantages. I

completly

to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent

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disagree with

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suggestion.

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with, the problems of modern inventions. One of the issue is that it increases pollution in the atmosphere.

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, the invention,

such

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as vehicle, produces carbon emission which is dangerous for the environment.

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, in India, the

summar

the warmest season of the year; in the northern hemisphere it extends from the summer solstice to the autumnal equinox

summer

temperature has been

rised

located or moved above the surround or above the normal position

raised

from 30 degree to 45

degree which

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degrees, which

degrees which

is a huge change in recent years due to the carbon dioxide from the vehicles. Another cause of

new invention

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the new invention

is lowering logical thinking in human. To clarify

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, the new equipment and software,

such

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as calculator, computer and mobile phone’s application, reduce burden on

human mind

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the human mind

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why people do not need to perform

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calculation task

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a calculation task

the calculation task

calculation tasks

themself which

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themselves, which

themselves which

reduce

human capacity

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the human capacity

of own thinking.

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, there are a number of benefits from the

lattest

up to the immediate present; most recent or most up-to-date

latest

inventions which increase

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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

importance in one’s life.

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, the

airplane

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, the best creation of humankind, helps to reduce the

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

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time

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from one country to another country. Before

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invention, it was taking several months for humans to travel

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for

a long

distance but

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distance, but

now, they can reach in just 48 hours in any area of the world with the facility of international flight.

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, it saves

time

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in the regular work of

calculation

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and increase the productivity. What is more, people can take quick action based on the output of the

calculation

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and reach to the solution in

the less

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the least time

time

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calculation

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used in the space inventions which is not possible without the latest equipment.

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tha

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the

gadget,

such

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as telephone, reduces the communication

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time which

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time, which

was so high in previous

time

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when people were sending post to communicate with their relative.

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, it

increase

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increases

internal bonding between the family member event they are living at long distance. In conclusion, whereas there are several problems with new inventions,

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as environmental damage and lowering human’s critical thinking, it

can not

cannot

be denied that benefits,

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as less

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

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, communication

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and

calculation

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time

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are crucial in human lives

thesedays

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these days

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, I believe the new inventions have more positive sides than negative sides.

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