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Some people believe that globalisation will eventually lead to a loss of cultural identity. What are your views on this?

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The advent of new technological advancements in
such
 areas as transportation or communication has been a major contributor to the spread of globalization, which is feared by many to eventually bring an end to cultural
identity
.
Nevertheless
, I am convinced that not only will globalization help retain and improve local cultures, but it
also
 will strengthen cultural bonds between distant communities. One reason to support
this
 idea is that through the process of globalization, people can realise how they are different from others in distant lands, which may lead to their interest in learning about other cultures.
This
 means every culture will have to preserve and present its unique features
such
 as local cuisine or craftsmanship in order to maintain foreign interest in it and have something to offer in competition with other communities.
As a result
, a sense of cultural
identity
 can be reinforced- even rekindled and restored whore it has already been lost. Another important point to justify
this
 viewpoint is that as cultures in different parts of the world familiarise themselves with the ceremonies, food and clothes of other people, it is highly likely that they will begin to improve on their own,
thus
 developing more efficient ways of life while retaining their original characteristics.
Last
 but not least,
although
 some people might think that the aforementioned "trade" of cultural features can doom the unique
identity
 of a culture, they need to consider that
this
 will not necessarily result in local people abolishing their culture and fully embracing another.
Instead
, the communication and exchange involved in globalisation can improve understanding and tolerance in the international community, which certainly can help with the conservation of older cultures and their sense of
identity
. To sum up. I think if the positive aspects of globalisation are considered and stressed, it is not likely to pose any threats to the cultural
identity
 of local communities and will
instead
 contribute to it in a variety of ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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