Some people believe computer and mobile phone technology has changed the way we communicate positively while others feel it has had a negative impact on communication with others. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days technology is changing all aspects of our life like
pay
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payment
payments
paying
methods, shopping, entertainment and etc.
one
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One
of the most changes have occurred in communication and it totally have shaped a new form. But it has its effects and it
could be affect
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could affect
our
life
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lives
and health. One of the advantages of high-tech communication is, we can connect with together each where we are. There is no need to stay at
home
and wait for calls and pay
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lots
of money for it. Technology makes it easy as we can see together by video call and talk to our family and friends where we are.
For example
students study abroad can communicate with their parents and can see each other every time. Another positive effect could be useful in emergency status. An unknown virus was spreading all over the world and government heralded a quarantine condition and said that all citizens had to stay at
home
. So there was only one way to communicate with each other and do their job
such
as sending files, presenting in lectures and staying in touch with teachers for students.
However
, it has its own disadvantages too. Technology makes we connect with others at
home
. So we go out less and our body’s activity reduces. It probably causes many diseases in our body like increasing fat and weakness of our muscles.
Also it’s
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possible high-tech communication causes we are more inward-looking. Technology of mobiles and computers makes we don’t present in society and don’t meet real new persons. So in some circumstance our character is changing to being introvert. In my
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opinion, this
this
type of technology is so practical and makes we can have many features.
Also it
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Also, it
has its negative
impacts but
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impacts, but
we can reduce it.
For
example I
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example, I
try to use it less and often talk to my friend to meet each other in parks or cinema.
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Also, I
try do exercise
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at
home
and stay my body fit.
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Finally, it’s
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an
effective and helpful shape of technology and we shouldn’t confront it. We all must be aware of its effects and educate to others how they should face it. We can control it by limiting use of them and so use its positives features

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