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The two maps below show an island before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The two maps below show an island before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
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As moving between countries has become easier, the trend of
study
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 or working abroad has
increase
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 in the
lately
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 years. Even though
this
 promises a
numbers
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number
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 of advantages,
people
also
 have to face some other
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 at the same
times
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time
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. For the advantages, the financial potential should be the most important.
Generally
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people
 choose to work
at
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anywhere that will pay them better, with
this
, they can support a whole family from their hometown.
Otherwise
,
people
 tend to move from a developing country to a developed one for its
advance
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 improvements in all
aspect
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aspects
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 of life.
For example
, a family
immigrates
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immigrating
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 to the US or EURO will have access to
is
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its
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 health care system, their children can enjoy a free and comprehensive education, which is worth all their effort to
going
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go
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 to a whole new country.
However
, there should be some advantages
such
 as unfamiliar environments.
For
example
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 not anyone is accustomed to the modern metro and bus system,
it
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and it
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 will take them a lot of time to transport around without their personal vehicle like in their hometown. Language is
also
 a great barrier, with a newly learned language
people
 can never express their full idea which can
sometime
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 cause many serious misunderstood.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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