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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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A single career is considered for some people as a style of
work
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 old fashioned.
Therefore
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, they believe that have many professions and
further
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 education should be the new trend
for
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of
 being more successful.
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, both views have points positives and negatives,
wich
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
 I will discuss in
this
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 essay. In the past, the common key for the
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
 was to have one occupation, where you could be steady until
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 retire.
This
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 model works perfectly for the
employeers
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
 in the 80’ and 90’, for the reason that there was not several professionals.
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, in
this
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 epoch was
more easy
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easier
easiest
 to keep in a workplace, because even many women were not totally in the labour world.
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, for
today
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today, this model
this
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 model does not
work
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, because there
are
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is
 quite uncertainty.
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, in the started
of
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on
with
 the 2000 the new generations realised that
have
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having
had
 one employment was not safe for them, due to now there are more professionals and the companies are not
promise
Suggestion
promised
promising
 a workplace for all the life. For
this
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 reason, the
milennials
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millennials
millionaires
 created a new ideas about to be a successful person in a
work
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,
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 those are
have
Suggestion
having
 more ways of earning money and
further
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 education.
For example
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,
nowdays
Suggestion
now days
, is very common to see graduates that
must to continue
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must continue
 learning across of
postgrades
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, because
this
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 could help them to get better opportunities. In conclusion, there is a new model of
work
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 that was created due to the world has changed a lot.
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, likely
this
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 style be very fashion today, but probably will change in the
next
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 year, because the time now always is uncertainty.

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