Attending a live performance(for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Although
many would argue that televised recap cannot exceed the traditional appreciation, I prefer observing events on television to attending them.
To begin
with, technology is incapable of offering the thrilling, genuine sensation as eye-to-eye plays.
For instance
, indirect programs cannot reproduce the echo of opera theatre, or the thundering explosions of firework performances that tremble even the most towering skyscraper.
Furthermore
, the events offer people an environment to truly be themselves-an environment without judgement. At the shows, people who share interests gather to be a harmonious crowd and enjoy the show together.
Hence
, attending the performances has become a way to escape reality for many.
However
, joining real-time shows has its drawbacks.
Firstly
, the cost to attend these events is obnoxiously high. General admission tickets to these shows are already expensive to many people, but for people to have the best experience at the performances, they need to buy higher class tickets. In theatre,
for example
, most of the seats with the best view of the stage are often reserved for the VIPs whose tickets cost hundreds of dollars.
By contrast
, watching the same shows on televisions is not only cost-effective, but
also
convenient as show viewers are facilitated with outlet functions
such
as recaps, close-up views, etc.
Secondly
, safety is not assured at these events. As hundreds of people gather at the same place, security forces have difficulties keeping track of all individuals and prevent criminals.
Therefore
, many cases of theft and serious crimes occur at concerts and matches. These can range from minor offences
such
as pickpocket to felonies, namely sexual harassment and homicide.
Moreover
, when accidents happen, the crowd hinders swift evacuations, and panic causes stampedes. These occasions happen more frequent than most people think and deaths cause by them are staggering high. In conclusion, I would choose to watch performances on television.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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