The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
The diagram given below illustrates the development of the West Park Secondary
School
from 1950 to 2010.
Firstly
in
1950
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there was a
school
building along the main road and the houses
next
to it. These houses were turned into the science block
along with
the car parking space in 1980. The playground behind the
school
was remained
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at
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the same place during the period from 1950 to 1980, but the farmland nearby was transformed into
the
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sports field. The main
school
building stayed untouched in 2010
as well as
the science block close to the main road.
However
, the part of the sports field behind the block was replaced by an enlarged car parking space. To sum everything up, it is obvious, that the West Park Secondary
school
was modernized through the 60 years of its construction.

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