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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
The eating habits of general public keep changing with time. Some prefer vegan food, some vegetarian and some prefer non-vegetarian. There is a section of people who think that everyone should turn vegetarian to safeguard themselves from health issues. I do not agree with
this
 view. To commence with, eating a vegetarian
dietdiet
a prescribed selection of foods
diet
diet diet
 can help people stay away from the diseases.
For example
, in 2007, H1N1 virus, which infected chickens
first
, was transmitted to humans by the consumption of infected eggs and chicken.
This
 resulted in the death of thousands of people worldwide. The over-consumption of
meat
 exposes one to the risk of cardiac diseases
such
 as increased cholesterol etc.
Moreover
, it is believed that a normal, who is vegetarian can get all the required nutrients from the plant based
diet
. Many people associate vegetarianism to being kind to animals. They believe that killing an animal for food is wrong because they cannot give life to them.
On the other hand
, eating non-vegetarian food has many benefits to it. The
meat
 based
diet
 provides the human body with the required nutrients
such
 as proteins, vitamins etc., in ample quantity.
This
diet
 has proven to increase the immunity of a person. Many doctors recommend
this
diet
 to their patients.
For example
, a friend of mine had weak immunity and was feeling sick very often, her doctor had suggested her to have red
meat
 too improve her immune system.
In addition
, seafood is very good, especially for the human health because it provides the human body with Vitamin A, Vitamin K, proteins, Keratin etc., whose very little quantities are found in vegetarian diets. To conclude, in my opinion, every person is independent to choose their dietary habits. Both vegetarian and
meat
 based
diet
 have their own positives and negatives. Some bodies can respond better to vegetarian and some to non-vegetarian foods.
Hence
, it is necessary for everyone to be open-minded on
this
 subject.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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