Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is the biggest source of pollution and waste. Others think that industries are the ones causing pollution. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is no doubt true that because of technical revolution our globe-Earth- has polluted more than before is recent decades. As reasons, majo
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the majority
individuals have been arguing the increasing number of vehicles in most metropolises, whereas industries are being demonstrated as the basic cause of pollution by the rest of the population. Even though, cars might be dangerous to the human health, industrial factories have cataclysmic means towards the planet Earth. On the one hand, emis
sion car
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emits
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bon dioxide from utilizing vehicles which works with oil production would be dangerous not only to the ecosystem but
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our health.
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, through using that above-mentioned oil products is
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waste, because the sun is shining for over millennium years for us. What I mean is electro models that require electricity as fuel
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of fossil fuel, have no detrimental effects on the natural world. Fortunately, most nations are striving to change the outdated form of cars to the modern ones.
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, electronic cars called TESLA has been producing for only two decades, but that kind of cars has already been popularized over most countries.
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, there will not be significant threats, in the recent future, by the emission of disastrous gas if we alter our machine system totally.
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, industries has
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o bad effects, in every aspect of our lives, even more than a great number of cars.
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, it is an undeniable fact that manufactures, effect on the natural world, have been increasing in numbers year after year.
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, six years ago a factory called KHANDIM had founded and three years ago a factory founded with the name GTL.
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, industrial factories are not only polluters,
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, contributes water waste by polluting results in major problems not only to the society, but
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the environment and animals in the shape of death and global warming. By way of conclusion,
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automobiles are considered as the main factor to stimulate environmental degradation and waste by a great number of people, industries are highly damaging indeed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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