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More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The overweight people are more regular seen everywhere, others said that it is better to raise the
price
 of fattening foods, in which it could overcome
this
 issue.
However
, I personally agree with
this
 statement which will be discussed in
this
 essay before a rational conclusion.
This
 problem is one of a serious matter of health.
First
 and foremost, the high
price
 of fast
food
 would confine them to buy anything what they want to eat. It is highly likely that the restriction of
food
 shopping could reduce their much more daily consumption. When they do not buy various kinds of fattening
food
,
for example
, their diet could be controlled properly.
Furthermore
, the relation of economic cost and healthy eating are extremely strong, since, it is helpful to fulfil their
food
 needs.
Therefore
, the policy maker
also have
Suggestion
also has
 to insist the seller of healthy foods to reduce its
price
 and to increase the
price
 of unhealthy foods.
This
 would automatically lead them to shop the cheap item.
On the other hand
, the obese people would
also
 try to manage their consumption, if the
price
 of their fattening
food
 becomes expensive. By means that they have to divide their money not only on
food
, but
also
 to the other necessities. It means that the government has to change their focus onto the other things
instead
 of
food
.
Moreover
, the level of health among society is one of the main important elements of government to control. Thereby, the cooperation between economic sectors and policy maker should be persistent in determining the
price
 of fast
food
 in their region. By way of conclusion, though, the instant foods are always provided by several markets, yet the
price
 could be controlled well to reduce the vast majority of consumers, by giving them the high
price
.
Besides
, the lowering
price
 of healthy
food
 would be the best choice for keeping a stability health. As I would restate that controlling the economic cost, especially on
food
 will support the over consumption of obese persons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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