Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this sets a bad example to the young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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era, exposure of money and fashion
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with
celebrities is becoming increasingly popular. The youth is getting influenced in
wrong direction
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the wrong direction
a wrong direction
by famous personalities who are well known for their looks and richness than their talent.
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essay will discuss how
renowned
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a renowned person
renowned people
person
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leave
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leaves
bad impact
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a bad impact
on
young
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the younger
generation. Celebrities have great influence on young ones. Social media plays a vital role to make
a
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an
ordinary
person
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turning into
famous personality
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a famous personality
famous personalities
overnight and helps to make them look extraordinary. No matter what, if the
person
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lacks any
talent but
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talent, but
exceptionally good
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at
showing off money will get famous soon.
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, a rich
person
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can post a
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
of riding his/her
lastest
up to the immediate present; most recent or most up-to-date
latest
car on
snapchat
an informal photograph; usually made with a small hand-held camera
snapshot
,
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instagram
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or
facebook
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Facebook
and that
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
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will be liked by million of people around the world, that's how they get recognised. In short, young generation is easily attracted to materialistic world rather than
appaulding
clap one's hands or shout after performances to indicate approval
applauding
upholding
actual talent.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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