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What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing number of schools providing tablets and laptop computer for students to use in school replacing books and other printed materials such as exams and assignments.

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Our society is becoming technically advanced at a really fast and unprecedented rate. A lot of people even 15 years ago wouldn't have thought that the medium of education will become
highly
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a highly technology
technology
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 dependent. I believe that the advantages of using tablets, laptops and other equipment for students far outweigh the disadvantages. Various researches have shown that using electronic medium for studies has a positive impact on de-forestation and the air quality index, meaning there is less demand for raw material to make paper which ultimately leads to decreased production. With
current global climate situation
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the current global climate situation
 we should be making every effort possible to reduce the cutting of trees and pollution. Another big advantage in my opinion is that the children now have to carry less load in their bags. During my school days I had to carry multiple books in my
school-bag
a bag for carrying school books and supplies
schoolbag
 and my shoulders would always hurt. It is a boon for the students who are already living a stressed-out life due to high expectations and multiple other factors, so not having to carry the books makes it one less thing to worry about.
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, depending too much on
technology
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 can be
detremental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
 sometimes. In case of a big level
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failure we
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failure, we
 could lose all the stored data used to make it functional.
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 restoration will put a massive burden on the economy of the state. Another disadvantage could be that children may forget the art of
hand-writing
something written by hand
handwriting
handwritten
 if they do not get enough stimulation for it. In conclusion, we should keep striding forward to make our
technology
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 fail-proof and at the same time we should encourage our children to use
hand-writing
something written by hand
handwriting
 for at least certain tasks.
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 way we will be able to preserve the heritage of
hand-writing
something written by hand
handwriting
 of different languages.

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