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In many countries, Government likes to spend more money on the arts. Some people agree with this. Others think the government should spend more on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to a section of society, funding
on
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of
for
to
 arts by government is acceptable
;
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;
However
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, Others expect regime is spending more in public services
such
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 as education and health. In my opinion, government should be investing more money on public institutes. To embark on, it is important to spend
of
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on
arts
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the arts
. If an administration of a
country
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 decided to stop funding for music, theatre etc., it would be a serious mistake and that could be destroy national identity. If any
country
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 does not
emphatize
to stress, single out as important
emphasize
 to
preverving
keep or maintain in unaltered condition; cause to remain or last
preserving
 folk music
,
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,
 arts, theatre; That will be gradually disappearing. As well as
preservating
keep or maintain in unaltered condition; cause to remain or last
preserving
 art will lead great impact on tourism.If people find
intersting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
 about about a culture they visit there. As an exemplification
,
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,
There are 6.2 million traveller visit in the Louver museum in 2012 and
luver’s
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Luver’s
loves
anuual
completing its life cycle within a year
annual
 income reached 216
millon
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
million
dollers
the basic monetary unit in many countries; equal to 100 cents
dollars
.
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, Improving public services is crucial for developing a
country
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.
First
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 investing in education
are
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is
 beneficial for
long term
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the long term
. As well as expend more in
educational system
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the educational system
educational systems
 is helpful for sustainable growth of a
country
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 in
long run
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the long run
.It is
government resposiblity
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a government responsibility
government responsibility
 to ensure that every citizen of
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country
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the country
a country
 is educated. As an exemplification, In Germany universities does not take any
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fee,
thus
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student
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the student
are encouraged
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is encouraged
 to higher study that’s
long time investment
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a long time investment
 make Germany one of the engineering
power houses
a highly energetic and indefatigable person
powerhouses
 in the World.
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, A strong health care system
are assure
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is assuring
 proper medical care for all efficiently in the
country
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.
In
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To
 recapitulate, I believe in allocating budget in different sector should be based on economic, social and political condition of a
country
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.
However
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, with limited
economy education
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economy, education
 and healthcare should always be
important
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more important
 than
arts
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the arts
.
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