The number of older people is increasing. Some people think it will cause problems in their countries, others believe this group is important to the society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the present situation where the problems of the aging
society
are increasingly serious, it has been a debatable issue whether
such
a trend will prompt problems or not while others opine that the older population is an essential part of
society
. In
this
essay, I am going to examine the question from both points of view and
then
give my own perspective on the matter. On one side of the argument, there are people who argue the benefits of having the older population considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
this
is that their long experience can help young people to understand the history of
this
world more effectively. The old people were witnesses of
this
world, and conveying information to successors is pretty ideal for their duties. It is
also
possible to say that older people are unlikely to be impulsive compared to young people and
this
characteristic can make
this
society
more stable.
On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that the old age security pension can be a big burden for the modern generation. People often have
this
opinion because they believe that there are too many retired people, but too few young workers. A
second
point is that conscription is becoming alarming in many nations. A particularly good example here is that in South Korea, the 'Ministry of National Defence' warned that the country would be suffering from a lack of conscripts, which can make the future of the country vulnerable. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I feel that the aging
society
can accelerate the falling of many countries and communities because young people have to load too many burdens, and there are so few young men to apply military service.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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