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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or the antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places.

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Nowadays, tourism is developing with the amazing speed emerging a trend of travelling to places whose conditions are so tough, especially, the Sahara desert, the Amazon jungle or the Antarctic.
Although
 there are reasons why people like to travel as they want to get new experience or have a fantastic adventure which can make them never forget, we
also
 need to look at other effected factors
such
 as broadening tourist’s minds, reduce tour costs or dangerous situations.
To begin
 with the positive side, most people agree having a journey to the difficult places possibly bring them more experience about the world especially the Sahara desert.
In other words
, by putting them self into the hard environment, we could automatically activate our original instincts to learn how to survive.
In addition
,
this
 may save our budget up to fifty percent of the tour cost. Obviously, we
also
 need to prepare well to visit wonderful places,
for example
, the Antarctic, by equipping warm clothes, compasses and so on but it is more affordable than having a tour in a five star hotel.
On the other hand
,
this
 perhaps contains hazards to the tourist’s life as the disadvantages. To illustrate
this
 point, imagine a situation when having a visit to the Sahara desert, unfortunately, visitors lose their map due to a terrible sandstorm. Unless they are clever at navigating the correct path, they will meet critical troubles, particularly, running out of water, being lost, have illusions and dead in the worst case.
Therefore
, visiting to wild areas is scarcely a good idea for any beginners. In conclusion,
this
 kind of outdoor activity not only brings us benefits
such
 as opening our minds, being visionary, learning new things and saving money for travel,
this
also
 contains criticism threatening our life whether we do not have a fair preparation.
Thus
, in my opinion, everyone who intends to have a visit these kind of highlighting landmarks should be concerned carefully.
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