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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this?

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Nowadays, it is quite common to see that people tend more towards ready-made cuisines than before. The primary reason behind eating Prepacked
food
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 is busy lifestyle and
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 results in
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the occurrence
 of serious
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 hazards among masses. The main factor behind the preference of junk
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 is because of the hectic schedule of population these days.
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 is only due to the fact that many people face heavy office workload during their working hours.
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, after getting free from their work, they feel tired and prefer to order snaked meals online.
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, sometimes their body does not respond them to prepare dishes at home for themselves. At that time, they chose the easiest way to get their meal ready.
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, Zomato
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 online home delivery services are famous among generation as they find it more convenient and get their
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 easily available in a single click of a button.
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, eating these kinds of cuisines have some detrimental effects on human
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. The market-made dishes are mostly comprised of harmful chemicals, colouring components, fats and spices, daily consumption of which leads to serious
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 problems. Some of these are indigestion, obesity, hypertension, cardiovascular diseases
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. The study of Times India revealed that 70% of students who lives away from their homes, confront problems like fat, lack of digestion and hypertension only because of regular consumption of fast foods. In conclusion, market-prepared foods are highly adopted by modern society due to their busy day-time and owing to
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 they face
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 related problems
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 as lack of digestion, skin related infections, body fat, increased tension level and heartaches.
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