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People born today can expect to live longer than people in previous generations. What are some of the positive and negative implications of this phenomenon?

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Throughout the years, people have been improving medical care and finding out new technologies for healing and new methods to live longer,
therefore
, who born presently can anticipate living more than their ancestors. Notwithstanding, it has not only benefits as more years stay alive, but
also
 a drawback for the Earth because overpopulation leads to faster consume restricted resources and create more pollution. On the one hand, since new generations predict to live longer, it has a positive influence on all their life because people around the world in any case afraid the death, thereby in all efforts they want to prolong their life to stay more with their close circle.
For example
, the elderly, especially women, people use medical operations and other tools
such
 as medical drugs or cream for rejuvenation.
Moreover
, few people can deny the fact what the scientist who lives more could create more innovation.
Nevertheless
, since the resources of the Earth are restricted, so if people live longer and longer and die rarely, their population and consumption eventually will become higher than possibly.
Likewise
, if elderly people live longer it could lead to shortage workplace for younger worker and more rapid urban sprawl: due to, young specialists after the university inept in their specialisation area
instead
 of an experienced older generation, and youth must have own accommodation.
For instance
, presently in Ukraine youth have trouble with work because companies prefer to hire older specialist.
Furthermore
,
such
 tendency lead to rapidly increase the level of all types of pollution, due to all people tends to own vehicles and megalopolises create more noise and light. To conclude, despite a profit of the person's long life, they cannot forget about the other side their activity
such
 as ending resources and high pollution level, and, for the time being, because of the plan for the diminishing harm of the Earth does not elaborate,
therefore
,
such
 phenomenon could lead to appalling aftermaths.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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