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Some People claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.

#people #claims #waste #homes #governments #requirement
Household
waste
 is becoming a major problem in
people
’s life
,
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 since it is not recycled properly. Currently, many speak about the necessity of involving the authorities by declaring it
as
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a law to
increment
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the
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garbage makes as reusable.
This
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community
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to
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recycle well their own
waste
 than earlier. There are so many factors
engaged
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 with not recycling home
waste
 abundantly.
People
 are used to
throw
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 away their garbage everywhere without considering the health and environmental damages. It is worth
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 out the reasons
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why
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society behaves
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carelessly. It
maybe
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they
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 are not educated
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environment
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 protection, Hygiene precautions, lack of time and more. As an example, we can see many
people
 throw their household
wastes
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besides
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 the roads
while
 they are travelling.
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, it is a must to find a solution
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 these unethical habits. Over the years the government and
people
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 searching solutions for
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 severe problem.
Finally
, most of them are requesting
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legal action which has to
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 by
government
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 to encourage the community to get more reusing procedures for
waste
.
Then
 only the
people
 adhere to recycling their garbage without creating issues.
For example
, if there is a way that authority can fine the
people
 who are not obedient to the rules,
then
 automatically society will align with
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recycling
by
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themselves
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. There are many ways to recycle house
wastes
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. We can categorize them and
can
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produce
it
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 to compost from some. Others can sell to
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 do recycling industrially.
People
 can gain some money from it
also
. All
this
 is because of the law against
of
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the rule breakers. In conclusion, Unless the authority fails to involve in creating laws against the
people
 who are not following
waste
 reusing mechanisms, it will be a huge problem in
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 future.
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Language
Avoid passive voice and subjectless sentences to increase clarity.
Writing
Consider varying your sentence structures to enhance reader interest and comprehension.
Grammar
Be consistent with verb tenses.
Vocabulary
Use the correct form of words. For instance, 'increment' when used as a verb means 'increase'. It should not be used as a noun.
Grammar
Work on prepositions for better context understanding.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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