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the average time and money spent at different type of restourants.

#time #money #type #restourants
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The table shows
comparison
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a comparison
 of the
avarage
approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value
average
averages
time
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 and
money
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 spent at
diferent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
type
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 of
restourants
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restaurant
restraint
, It will discuss into two sections, which are
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time
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time, then
then
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next
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 is
money
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 that people used to
spent
Suggestion
spend
 in every each
type
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 of
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restraint
restaurants
.
First
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 passage is about
time
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, as we can see the
avarage
approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value
average
time
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 that people spent in
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restraint
 always
increased according
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increased, according
 to luxury
type
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 of
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restraint
restaurants
, the fastest
time
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 owned by fast-food
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restaurant
, and the longest owned by sit-down
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restaurants
. And
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 thing is level of increase is measured significant.
Futuremore
in addition
Furthermore
Future more
 is about
money
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, overall the expense for every
type
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 of
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restraint
 is increases depending on
luxury
Suggestion
the luxury type
type
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 of
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restraint
restaurants
, people spent highest
money
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 at
sit-down
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a sit-down restaurant
sit-down restaurant
sit-down restaurants
restourant
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 and the cheapest at fast-food
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restaurant
. In conclusion, we able see that people spent less
money
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 and
time
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 for the fast-food
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restaurants
type
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, and people would like to
spent
Suggestion
spend
 more
money
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 and
time
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 for sit-down
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restourant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restaurants
.
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