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The old generation often hold traditional ideas about the correct way of life, thinking and behavior. However, some people think that these ideas are not helpful for young people to prepare for modern life. To what extent do agree or disagree?

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The pie charts compare the percentage of people’s total expenditure in six different categories in a specific European nation in two years 1958 and 2008. It is clear that citizens in the surveyed country spent the least amount of money on
travel
/
transport
, entertainment and
luxury
 goods in two years.
Additionally
, while the proportion of money allocated to
luxury
 goods,
travel
/
transport
 and housing increased, there were decreases in the figures for other commodities and services. In 1958, the percentage of expenditure on food was highest, at 32%, while the figures for
travel
/
transport
, entertainment and
luxury
 goods were significantly lower, at 8%, 13% and 7% respectively. At the same time, the amount of money spent on housing made up 22% of the total spending, and the figure for clothing was slightly lower, at 18%. In 2008, the expense for housing increased noticeably by 10% to 32% to become the highest figure in the pie chart. There were rapid increases to 17% in the expenditure of both
luxury
 goods and
travel
/
transport
. Meanwhile, the figures for entertainment, clothing and food experienced decreases to 6%, 16% and 12% of the total spending in the country given respectively.

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