The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.
There are several similarities between what younger and older
people
say makes them most happy.
However
, there are several striking differences.
Firstly
, let us look at the similarities. It is noticeable that for both younger and older
people
, the highest percentage says that achievement at work brings them most
happiness
: 31% for the younger age group and 32% for the older group. Doing hobbies is
also
very important for both groups: the
second
largest percentage of both age groups mention doing hobbies as making them most happy. Turning now to the differences, many younger
people
regard having a good appearance as extremely important: 18% of them state
this
brings them most
happiness
.
This
is followed by 15% who state that travel brings them
happiness
. Neither of these two factors is mentioned by older
people
.
Instead
, 20% of older
people
report that having financial security is most important to their
happiness
and 14% say they feel most happy when they are with their family.
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