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Nowadays more tasks at home and work are being performed by robots. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Robotics increasingly plays a role both in the home and the workplace.
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 is occurring because of advancements in technology and it should be seen as a positive development because it reduces a person's workload. People rely on machines because of the latest developments in machine learning.
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 is because big data and the fact that we are all connected via the internet means that algorithms can learn basic tasks.
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, software does not need to be programmed but can learn about the millions of other devices around the world.
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, Telsa cars now come with Autopilot, which drives the car itself and shares the data with all other Tesla vehicles. Automaton should be welcomed because it frees people from drudgery of everyday duties. Our day to day lives are dominated by menial, repetitive chores that take up much of our time. Automating these is possible and technological solutions allow us to focus on more meaningful activities.
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, there is now a robot that both cut grass and hoover carpets and the manufacturers estimate that
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 will save the average person 3 weeks per year. Owners are free to choose what to do with these extra hours
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 of being forced to carry out routine work. In conclusion, machines carry out tasks for us due to the fact that engineers and computer scientists are pushing the boundaries of science and engineering, and these innovations should be welcomed because they emancipate humankind from routine toil.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Artificial intelligence (AI)
  • Humanoid
  • Machine learning
  • Task allocation
  • Operational costs
  • Manual labor
  • Disruptive technology
  • Ergonomics
  • Unemployment
  • Cybersecurity
  • Technological singularity
  • Redundant workforce
  • Innovation
  • Ethical considerations
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