People say that a child’s success is dependent on the way parents bring them up. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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At present we can see or hear that most young people are not so successful as their parents all over the world. At the same time, people suggest that a child's

success

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is dependent on the

way

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parents bring them up. Personally, I agree with

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opinion and it will be discussed why.

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with, the highest role in a child's

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plays their parents and the

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bring them up, because the most children love repeat that did their parents.

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, the parents must be responsible for their children since a young age.

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, statistics all over the world shows that at present, many young people go into negative ways and one of the main reasons is following; not enough attention, their behaviour in society, attention to the environment and the

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bring them up.

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, children or young people who are not enough brought up by their parents can be a society problem (like a thief).

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, there are a lot of young people who achieve the

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when they were only 18 or 19 years old, because they were brought up since a childhood.

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, a singer Billie Ellis, who is 19 years old but famous all over the world

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other ones.

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, she says that no one becomes successful if he (or she) do not improve himself (or herself)

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she added that the role of parents is larger

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then

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others. To sum up all above mentioned opinions or suggestions we can say that child's

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is dependent on the

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bring them up

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the environment where they live.

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success

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will not come to you if you do not work on yourself hard without stoping.

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