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COMPARE AND CONTRAST HO CHI MINH CITY AND DA LAT CITY.

Have you ever been to Ho Chi Minh
City
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 or Da
Lat
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City
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 in your life? Every year, many people come to Ho Chi Minh
City
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 and Da
Lat
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 to travel, work and study. While
two cities
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the two cities
 share some features in common, they seem very different from each other.
First
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 of all, Da
Lat
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 is known as a year-round cold mountainous area, located at about 1500 meters above sea level. In the winter, drizzle and low temperature make outdoor activities more awful because of feeling chilled to the bone and dry cracked skin.
In contrast
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 to Da
Lat
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, lying in the Southern Vietnam, quite near the equator with the height of only 20 meters above sea level, Ho Chi Minh
City
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 has to suffer
from
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for
 a long period of heat-wave which lasts about half of a year. It is boiling hot that no one
want
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wants
 to be kept away
from air conditioner
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from an air conditioner
.
However
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, fortunately, Ho Chi Minh
City
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 usually received a lot of showers which makes it less hot in the summer. The
second
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 difference from a mountainous
city
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 and
a
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an
deltaic
insanely irresponsible
idiotic
 one is the business. Due to its chilly climate, Da
Lat
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 seems only suitable for leisure travel;
therefore
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, tourism and service in
this
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city
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dominates
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dominate
 the economy. In the suburb, there are a lot of line buildings served mainly for visitors who loves imposingly natural scenery. Contrary to Da
Lat
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, Ho Chi Minh is considered as a comprehensively developed municipal
city
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 in Vietnam, which means that most of economic sectors including
industry
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industrial
 and service are more advanced than other areas in
region
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the region
.
Therefore
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, Ho Chi Minh
City
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 absorbs a lot of foreign investment, which attracts tens of thousands of newly-graduated students and the jobless who moved to the
city
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 for searching for occupations. In conclusion, Ho Chi Minh
City
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 and Da
Lat
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City
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 are dissimilar in some aspects, especially climate and business and
thus
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purpose
Suggestion
the purpose
 of travelling to two cities is
also
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 not the same. Ho Chi Minh
City
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 seems potential for the person who are looking for jobs meanwhile they find Da
Lat
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 much more preferable to travelling
in
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on
during
 holidays.

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