Many people believe that music has an important role in society while others believe that it is only a form of entertainment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to some

music

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could play a major role in society

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however

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opponents believe that it is

only good way

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the only good way

to relax and form of entertainment.

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the two sides

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the former point seems more justifiable to me when

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with the latter one. On the one hand

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music

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is the best way to relieve stress

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tiredness which are generated from the side of people work and studies

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I think.So people consider that

music

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is very important.I could share

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view as when people listening their favourite

music

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they feel euphoric

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happy and relaxed.

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good transition

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a good transition

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a stressful work environment

towards relaxing domestic entertaining lifestyle, I believe Japan based research could be good example here to prove my stand.Workers who have a very demanding job always stress out

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they listen to their favourite

music

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they

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tend to be

energetic fast

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energetic, fast

and can continue their work properly.

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it might be time for only

relaxition

(physiology) the gradual lengthening of inactive muscle or muscle fibers

relaxation

from opponents' perspectives

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They do not understand the value of

music

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in my opinion. To be more precise

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it is not

only form

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the only form

entertainment but

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entertainment, but

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proper

triggerer

lever that activates the firing mechanism of a gun

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triggers

treasure

to enhance

children

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children's

communication

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skill

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I think.

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children who are brought up with

music

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as long as their kindergarten age

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they tend to possess good

communication

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skill

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.And I mean they are highly likely become sociable adults

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It brings about they can make

faithfull

steadfast in affection or allegiance

faithful

friends easily

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children that have good

communication

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skill

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they could overcome any difficult condition easily

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I guess. To conclude

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music

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is not only

entertaining activity but

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an entertaining activity, but

an entertaining activity but

paramount way

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a paramount way

to clear minds

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relieve stress.What is more it is

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vital in

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child's

children's

communication

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skill

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development.For

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reason

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I am strongly convinced that by

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the first side

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

295 words

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Many people believe that music has an important role in society while others believe that it is only a form of entertainment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Today's young generation is facing many problems in school and at home. What are the problems? What can parents do to help their teenage children?

Some people believe that modern technology encourages more social behavior. Others say that this leads to lesser sociable behavior.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is beneficial for students to go to private secondary schools, but others think that it has negative effects. Discuss both points of view and give your own oipnion

The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements?