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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?

#people #technology #relationships #development
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Advancement in
technology
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 has changed the way we communicated. It affected the
type
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 of interaction people has now compared to
past
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the past
, now they are making virtual friends and
relationship
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 on
internet
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the internet
. It is often debated that what
type
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 of
development
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 it is. Some
says
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say
 it is
an
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a
 negative
development
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 due to
distance
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 it created among them. In my opinion,
this
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 is a positive
development
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 because they can talk with others
inrespective
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in respective
 of
distance
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.
To begin
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 with, the
type
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 of
relationship
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 between people has been changed due to
technology
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. In the past, humans
meet
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met
 with each other and
thats
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that's
 how they talked and become friends.
However
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, now a days with
advancement
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the advancement
 of
technology
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, they meet various unknown people via social media app like
facebook
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Facebook
 and
whatsapp
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 and become virtual friends. To illustrate with an example
,
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,
accrding
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
 to a survey,
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of people
agrees
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agree
 that the
type
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 of
relationship
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 has been changed due to the
technology
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. Some argued that
this
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 advancement has
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
detrimental effects
 as they hardly meet with each other. Now all conversation happened on phone via various social media apps which creates the
distance
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 between people and they get
very less chance
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a very less chance
 to get one-to-one communication.
However
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, others, including me, believe that,
this
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 is a positive
development
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 as it gives chance people to communicate with friends and relative
inrespective
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in respective
 of
distance
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. We have many friends and relatives who
sattled
established or decided beyond dispute or doubt
settled
 in abroad,
technology
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 gives
opportunity
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an opportunity
 to talk with them which was not possible in
past
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the past
. To conclude,
technology
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 changed the
type
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 of
relationship
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 as people are more into making virtual friends. Some
people though
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people, though
this
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 is
negative
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a negative development
development
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 as it creates
distance
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 between
people
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people, however
however
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 others, including me, believe
this
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 is a positive
development
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 as it gives us
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to communicate with friends
inrespective
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in respective
 of
distance
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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