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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

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The issue of large investment in
space
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 exploration missions is a source of controversy nowadays when there are many people think that important
aspects
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aspect
 of life which should be taken into consideration. In my opinion, I totally agree with the argument of reducing these missions would bring some various advantages.
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, less money invested in
space
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 missions allows more urgent problems could be solved. Homeless, diseases, starvation, environment
are
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is
 the serious issues over the world nowadays leading to many deaths and negative effects on our lives.
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, these problems could be resolved with the cost lower than planning for outer
space
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 missions. Recently, a prestigious magazine has interviewed some economists and made a simple calculation which shows that we could supply enough clean water for Africa just by canceling only one
space
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 mission
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, if the number of crew flying to
space
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 increases, the risks to humans and the universe will
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 decrease. There are many evidences show that
astronauts’s
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astronauts’
 health after a spaceflight decline. Weightlessness environment has caused variations in biorhythm which have negative effects on their constitution, immune system.
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, today, there is growing concern about the threat
space
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 junk poses to spacecraft.
This
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 waste
can not
can not
cannot
 disappear in the universe because of gravitation of
earth’s surface
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the earth’s surface
, so they not only lead to pollution in the
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space but
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space, but
also
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 have the ability to fall toward the earth making unforeseen danger. Admittedly, some scientists may claim that these
exploration
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explorations
 could help us find another living planet with pollution and global warming today.
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, I think
this
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 argument is not convincing since it takes a long time to discover where humans can survive excepted earth.
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, we should invest in some policies, solutions to reduce pollution and protect the environment by applying technology and science. To sum up,
although
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space
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 exploration could lead to significant scientific discovery, it is a better use of money to invest less in those missions and shift our focus to other current emerging problems

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