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Government needs to spend money to encourage the development of sport and art for school students, rather than to support professional sports and art events. Do you agree or disagree?

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The professional sports and the cultural programs have been in existence for a long time and have played an important part in people life.
Therefore
, I disagree that the government should direct the funds allocated to
such
 events towards encouraging sports and arts among school students. A number of arguments support my opinion.
To begin
 with, the professional sports bring name and fame to a country. Countries, which spends a lot on
such
 sports, are always leading in sports in the Olympic Games, the World Cup and other
such
 International competitions. Professional sports
also
 boost the economy as millions of spectators come to see and cheer for their favourite teams in the stadiums. There are
also
 big benefits from advertisements on TV as millions of people sit in front of the TV and watch sports shows.
Furthermore
, the cultural programs are effective ways that help people relax and reduce stress after work. Every day, there are a variety of cultural performances happening a; over the world. There are fascinating thousands of young people as well as adults. These cultural programs not only enrich people’s mind, but
also
 spread our rich culture globally.
Finally
, it is difficult to motivate children to take up sports and arts without naming and praising superstars in professional activities. The success of people
such
 as Sachin Tendulkar (a cricket player) or A R Rahman (a musician) is even more important in encouraging children to participate in sport and art subjects and any other kind of motivators. How could we tell our children to put more efforts on arts and sports if it would not lead to any money and success in the future? To sum up, it can be reiterated that spending on professional sports and cultural programs is imperative for the governments. Promoting sports in school should
also
 be there, but not at the expense of professional sports and cultural events.

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