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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter, explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently discovered from my friend Adam that your museum is looking for part-time volunteers. Since
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 I am taking a hospitality course at my university, I believe that
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 role would help me to learn real-world problem-solving skills. My
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 offers vast skills that could help the museum to work smoothly, it contains skills like IT, customer service, attention to detail and eagerness to learn. I
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 have to offer punctuality, a can-do attitude and commitment to the assignment. I
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 raised by hardworking parents, they taught me that every job is crucial in society, considering I want you to be aware that I can do cleaning and office chores as well. I am available immediately on the weekends,
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, on the weekdays I am partially available after business hours. I could be contacted via phone or email. Please find these details at the bottom of the letter. Yours sincerely, Muhammad

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coherence cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity and coherence. For example, the second paragraph merges your skills and personal values which could be more effectively separated.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or details about your skills and experiences to strengthen your task response. This will demonstrate the usefulness of your skills to the museum context more convincingly.
task achievement
Consider providing a brief conclusion to sum up your enthusiasm and readiness for the role, which will enhance the overall effectiveness of your letter.
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