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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done? Write an essay giving reasons for your answer and including any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Schooling is an inevitable part of one's life
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Therefore, it
 is crucial to make learning at school enjoyable, so that children are able to pay proper attention in the classroom.
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However, these
 day students do not concentrate in educational institutes due to various reasons.
This
 essay will former scrutinised reasons behind
this
 problem and latter provide possible solutions to overcome
such
 problem. To commence with the reasons why children are unable to focus on studies in school and
First
 and foremost reason is that use of traditional mode of teaching at schools which makes a learner passive and learning a boring experience because there is less participation by kids and they get easily bored.
Secondly
, more use of electronic gadgets is
also
 main reason. Nowadays students Spend most of their time to watching television, using mobile phone and playing video games and
this
 effect their life negatively.
Therefore
, when they are at an institution and think of these things and their concentration is affected. There are possible solution to curb
such
 problems the most prominent one is the introduction of modern modes of teaching
such
 as projector, audio visual aids and smart classes which makes learning playful experience.
Secondly
, proper counselling must be done to both of kids and parents by the school staffs
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 Children should stay away from the electronic devices.
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, Feeling of empathy must be inculcated among students so that children are not excluded from others. To recapitulate, there are several reasons due to students are Unable to pay attention at schools
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, introducing the modern modes of teaching and learning with interesting example students' concentration will be improved.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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